I gave it another go.

[deanl]

oops oops oops

[Paul Mack]

Very Nice. We get a very clear picture of why Anthony is choosing to take this route.

Harvey is an interesting charecter...going to be interesting to see how his role develops.

You might want to change the location of Anthony in the dream sequence. Maybe relocate it to a mansion or something that can be readily identified as belonging to the upper crust. Keep the meeting except move it to a colder/more barren part of the house. You have some great tension btwn Darren and Anthony, do keep it if its integral to the story. As for the wife and daughter they could be out shopping and Harvey is their caretaker. Makes it a lot more whimiscal and innocent. [img]wink.gif[/img]

Paul Macomber